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Yourwritingoughttocontainthreeparts,yourviewpoint,thesupportingideas,andtheconclusion.
Comeandjoinusinvolunteerworkrightnow!
OnVolunteer
黄昕彤辽宁省鞍山市鞍山一中108班
ThedefinitionofthewordvolunteerinLougnan(Longman)Dictionaryissomeonewhohelpsotherssponstaneously(spontaneously)andwillingly.That&
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strue!
Lifeisastyleofenjoyingyourself,notonlybyentertaingandeidingyourself,butalsobytheprocessofhelpingothers.
Undoubtfully,thosevolunteersrevealtheirgreatloveandpassionfortheircountry.Loveistheeternalthemeoftheworld,Withouthove(love),it&
slikebirdswithoutwings,failingtoshowitstalentsofflying,It&
slikespringwithoutflowers,buryingischarmingfragrantsinthedeepsoil.TheirvoluntyworkunitesChina,shouingtheworldhowunitedChinesepeopleareshockingtheworldofitscooperation.
Peoplearoundthecountryaremakingtheireffortstohelpingothers,whichleavestheworldanimpressionthatChinaisavealcountry,andallthepeopleherearelikebrothersandsisters,whocaresalotforothers.YoucanneverimaginehowtouchedIwaswhenIwatchedtheTVprogramcalled“MovingChina”.13peasantsfromtangshangvolunteeredtohelpthosevictimsofSichuangonhearingthetremendousearthquakehappenedthere,leavingalltheirfarmworkdoneinthefieldtheysacrifiledanythingandhelpedothersatanycost,fortheyknewtheglantpainstheearthquakebringstopeople.Theycanneverforgethowmuchpainstheyhavendertakenintheearthquakeandhowmuchhelptheyhavereceivedfromtheworld.Theycomparedtheirownfeelingstothevictimsandpassedthesplriton.Inthissense,peoplewillpassthespiritfromgenerationtoqueneration,fromChinatoallovertheworld.Then,howsweetwilltheWorldbe!
Ihaveadreamthatoneday,Iwillbeamemberofthevolunteerteam.Ihaveadreamthatoneday,I&
llmakecontributionstoChinahoweverslightestitmaybe.IhaveadreamthatonedayI&
llbeafounderofaworldCharity,helpingpeopleallovertheworld.I&
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专家建议:
整篇文章条理清晰,结构完整,总体感觉很好。
但有个别语法错误,固定搭配有些用得不够准确,建议多用课本学过的固定搭配或是词组造句。
专家点评:
文章语言流畅,运用了修辞手法,展现出一定的语言功底。
此外,论据生动有力,让人信服。
如果句子之间的多用些关联词就更好了。
陈茜江苏省哈尔滨市第三中学高三18班
Deargrandfather:
Howareyou?
Iamwritingtoinviteyoutojoinus,inthenextyear,tobeavoluntearinthegreatevent,whichistoholdinShanghai.We,agenerationborninthe90sinourcity,havemadeateamtodothevolunteerwork.AndyouarewelcomedbyallourteammembersawingtoyourgreatamountofknowledgeaboutChinesetraditionsandculture.Pleasedon&
ttellmeyouaretoooldtodothisjob.Ibelieveyouaresuretoacceptmyinvitationafterreadingmyfollowingexplannationoftheimportanceofthevolunteerwork.
Nowadays,volunteerwork,whichhasraisedpublicinterestandconcern,isbecommingmoreandmorepopularthroughouttheworld.Asisknowntoall,volunteerworkisnotonlymeaningfulbutalsonecessary.Onemypersonalwete,what&
smore,it&
sinterestingandpleasant!
Ithelpusdevelopoursel.
Firstly,forindividuals,especiallythoseyoung,todovolunteerworkisanawailuabewanytogoinsocialexperience.Bydoingvolunteerwork,theycanmeetvorriouspeopleandtheymayrunacrossallkindsoftroubles.Theyhowever,canbecomematureanddeterminedbysolvingtheseproblems.Youknow,nopains,nogains.Also,individualswillrealizethattheydomakeadifferenceinsomeoneelse&
slife,eventhewholeevent,theworld!
Theirconfidencecanberovisedandconfidenceiswhatittakestodoanyjobwell.
Forfamilies,ifyou&
rethesidethatreceivedthehelpofthevolunteers,ofcouseyourissuewillbemoreeasilydealtwith.Ifyou&
rethesidewhogiveothersyourhand,youwillrealizethereexistsnobetterwaytoeducateyourchildrenthat“avirtwredeseruesamother”becauseyou&
llgetthebestpresent-smiledeeplyfromone&
sheart,inthewholeworld.
Itisagreatchanceforallmembersgettingclosertoeachotherincommunitiesbytakingpartinvolunteerwork.Theirteamspirits,theirco-operationwillbegreatimproued.So,whynot?
Themostimportantly,forthewholeworld,fortheentirehumanrace,volunteerworkwillmakeearthabetterplacetolivein,itisthroughvolunteerworkthatweknowtherearesomanypeoplearewillingtohelpothersalthoughtheycan&
tgetmoneyfromit.Itisthroughvolunteerworkthatweknowweareallbrothersandsisters,thatweareallfamilies.
Mydeargrandfather,caeon!
JoinusandhelpintroduceowrgreatChineseculturetotheworld.21centuringisonopencewtury.Youcantrustyourselfandpleasetrustus,too!
We&
llhelpyouandweneedyouhelp!
Let&
smaketheworldabetterplacebybeingavolunteer!
It&
sasmallstepforusbutitisaleurgeoneforthewholeworld!
Loveyou.
Yourgranddaught.
句子之间的衔接做的还不是很到位,建议多练练关联词的用法。
词汇不够丰富,句型变化不多,建议多看些范文,多练一些经典句型。
文章立意很好,整体结构清晰,语言大体流畅,还能够引经据典,显示出有一定的英语(论坛)文化底蕴。
Tobeavolunteer,Bringarayofsunshine
陈天悦山东省济南市山东省齐钢高级中学高三4班
DearTom:
Itisagreatpleasureformetohavethewondefulchancetoputpentopaperandsendmygreetingstoyou.Yousaidthatyouwantedtobeavolunteeranddidn&
tknowwhetheryoushouldornot.Iwanttohelpyouanalyseit.
Inmyopinion.Ithinkitisnotnolyagoodchancetohelpothersbutalsoagoodopportunitytomakeselp-improvement.You&
dbetterparticipateinthevolunteerwork.Ifwecompaneyouthtoflouers,asisoftenthecase,thentheyoungvolunteersarethemostbeautifulflowers.Byjoininginthevounteerwork,youwillleamhowtohelpothersandhowtoloveothers.What&
smoreyoucanalsofinditoutthattherearemanypeoplesufferingfromdisasterandthenyouwillvalueyourcomfortablelife.Althoughyoumayfeelverytiredasavolunteeranditmaycostyoumuchtimetohelpothers,Istillinsistthat
youshouldbeavolunteerbecausetheadvantagesbrightaboutbyvolunteerworkoverweighthe
disadvantages.
Itallthepeoplerefusedtobevolunteers,thepeoplesufferedfromthemay12earthquakecouldloseheartandmostofthemwouldn&
thavethechancetosurvivefromthatdisaster.Ifnoneofthepeoplewantedtobeavolunteer,theBeijingolympicGameswouldbeafailure.Ifeverypeopledidn&
tfeellikebeingavolunteer,therewouldbenopeoplecleaningtheenvironmentandprotectingthebeautifulsceneryautomatically.Itwasterrible!
Fromallmentionedabove,volunteersplayaveryimportantpartinourdailylife.TobeavolunteerwillgaingloryforChina.Asisbrowtoall,Chinesechildrenarealwayslaughedatforlackofpractice.Sotobeavolunteerisagoodchancetocanpensateforit.
Frommypointofview,it&
shightimethatyoubecameavolunteerandlearnedtohelpothers.Ifeveryonemakesacontributiontohelpingothers,theworldwillbemuchmorebeautiful!
Atlast,wishyouallthebest!
Yourssincerely.
Lily.
一篇文章的结构是评判该文章优劣的重要参考标准,但结构显然不够简洁清晰,所以建议作者能在平时多阅读英文报纸上的文章,有意识地观察规范的英语文章是怎样设计结构的。
文章二三段的结构很混乱,建议这样的文章段落都应写成总、分、总的形式更能突出文章的逻辑性,并在“分”的部分也一条一条分开写,而不是都堆在一段内,让人分不清哪句是观点哪句是论证,很混乱。
另外注意同义词的替换已是文章表达更丰富,比如文章中多次出现的帮助他人就都是使用:
helpothers就显得过于单一了~Volunteers
李彦妮辽宁省鞍山市鞍山一中10.14班
Thereisavividsayingthateverygloriouseventisjustifiablyconnectedwithvolunteerswhoisagroupofpeople,holdingthefundementaltohelpotherswithoutpay-backbenefits.In1993,whenthenewwordburtoutamongsocialsociety,mostofusgaveaslurtoitinconsideringofeconomy.Thespecialgroup,however,isjustlikeariver-smallatfirst,containedwithinitsbanks,floodpassionallythenmergedintothesea,forthesenseofmoralconsiderations.Andnow,Iquitesupporttobeavolunteer.
Wecanneverforgetthesemovingscenes:
AgroupofadolecentsfromBeijingdashedtotheCityofWenchuanwhogaveuptheircomfortablelivingsituationsandpickeduptheheavyburdentosavepeopleburiedintotheground,whileamiddleagedwhitecollarwhothrewawayhiscomputerandsalarycameheretofetchwictims&
livesfromthedeath.Itisvolunteerswhorushedtothisplacewhichhassufferedfromthecatastrophethatgaveagreathelptothosevictimsinneed.Avolunteercansupportapieceofsky,andthisonereasonIameagertojointhem.
Secondly,onlyavolunteerwhoisinactivepartinBeijingOlympicGameswillhegiveagreathelptothoselosers.ItisvolunteerswhogaveusawarmwelcometoBeijingthatputtheglorioussportsmeetingfrominchaostoinorder.Aperson,asweknow,whohasn’tjoinintothegroupofvolunteerisoneoftheunfortunatevictimsofthissocietywhichisoccupiedwithlove.Allofusareinhighpressureinthisadversecircumstance.Ourmi
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