届高考英语浙江十校联考读后续写写作指导Word文件下载.docx
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届高考英语浙江十校联考读后续写写作指导Word文件下载.docx
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relighterthanIam.Iftheiceholds,wecanrunandslidecarefullyonit.If11befiin."
IwantedtopleaseHarry,andIthoughtaboutthefunofalongslideontheice.Ibegantoslideacrossthepond.
Inthemiddleofthepond,theicegavewaywithasuddencrack(裂缝)!
Istretchedout(伸展)myarms.ThenextthingIknewIwashangingontotheedgeofaholeintheicebyarmsoutstretchedontheice.FrommyshouldersdownIhunginicywater,Ithoughtofthebottomofthepond.Iknewitwouldbeblackandawfuldownthere,fullofmudandmayberottingcreatures.
Itriedtoclimboutofthehole,butwhenIgotakneeontheice,itbrokelikewindowglass.AgainandagainItriedtogetout.Againandagaintheicebrokeintopieces.Theholewidened.Iwaswearingacoatofheavymaterial.Asitbecamecompletelywet,itdraggedmedown.Iwastiredofthestruggleandrestedwithmyarmsstretchedoutontheice.
IlookedatHarryonshore.Heseemedrootedtothespot."
Ican,tgetout!
"
IscreamedwhenIcaughtsomebreath.
注意:
1. 所续写短文的词数应为150左右;
2. 至少使用5个短文中标有下划线的关键词语;
3. 续写部分分为两段,每段的开头语已为你写好;
4. 续写完成后,请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。
Paragraphl:
Harryturnedandranfromthepond.
Paragraph!
:
ThemomentIcrashedthroughthekitchendoor,sobbing,mumrushedover.
二.写作构思
1. 确定文章主题:
原文摘自《英语沙龙》这本杂志,本文以第一人称进行续写,主要讲述了姐弟两个人在冬天去池塘玩耍,在弟弟怂恿下,主人公走到结了冰的河水上却掉入水中的故事。
所以主题为主人公“我”吸取经验,不再鲁莽行事。
很多学生会把主题误定位“亲情”或者“谅解”等,容易写偏题。
2. 写作难点:
①对于提示句的理解和衔接;
②第二段如何进行结尾
Harryturnedandranfromthepond.
1. Seeingmybrotherrunningaway,sosurprisedwasIthatIcouldn'
tstopwondering,"
isheseekinghelporisheleavingmeinthelurch?
(动作+情感+语言的描写三连击,采用非谓语位于句首做状语,情感部分运用部分倒装)
2. HoweverfHarrycamebackwithanoakHmbfslowlyandcautiouslyapproachingthepond,andyelling,
please,holdonthere!
(3个串联动作,谓语,非谓语运用自如,再结合进语言描写)
3. Scarcelyhadhearrivedattheedgeoftheicyholewhenhebentover,pushingtheHmbtowardme.(动作描写,加入scarcely...when...部分倒装句型)
4. Whenaslendertopbranchwaswithinreach,Iimmediatelygrabbedittightly.
5. Handoverhand,Iclimbedoutofthehole,wetandcoldfromheadtotoe.
6. Harrytookoffhisowncoatandgaveitto
me,murmuringwithhisheadlowered,"
lamso
sorry..."
(与句2相似,3个串联动作结合进语言描写)
7. Unabletoutterasingleword,Ijustwantedtogobackhometohavesomethingwarm.
Paragraph2:
77?
emomentIcrashedthroughthekitchendoor,sobbing,mumrushedover.
1. Worriedtoknowwhathappenedtome,mumraisedhervoiceandasked,"
honey,whathappened?
(ft感+动作+语言描写三连击)
2. "
IwenttothepondwithHarry,and..."
Iexplainedthewholethingtomum,andhardlycouldIcontainmytears.(语言+动词,结尾运用部分倒装)
3. AfterknowingthathowterriblethingIhadmet,shewasoverwhelmedwithsadness.
4. Atthesametime,shewenttothebathroom,filledthetubwithhotwaterandhelpedmetohavearecoveringS’O心(3个串联动作)
5. OnlyafterIfinishedshowerdidIfeelthatIcamealiveagain.(再次运用部分倒装,整篇文章共运用4种不同类型的倒装句)
6. Ofcourse,mumalsodidn'
tforgettogivemybrother
agoodlectureandpunishmentaswell itwastimefor
himtogetintotrouble!
7. Sincethen,Ichanged./learnedtosaynoifIdidn'
ttrulywanttodosomething.(点题)
四.成品赏析
Harryturnedandranfromthepond.Seeingmybrotherrunningaway,sosurprisedwasIthatIcouldn7tstopwondering,"
However,HarrycamebackwithanoakHmb,slowlyandcautiouslyapproachingthepond,andyelling,"
Scarcelyhadhearrivedattheedgeoftheicyholewhenhebentover,pushingtheHmbtowardme.Whenaslendertopbranchwaswithinreach,Iimmediatelygrabbedittightly.Handoverhand,Iclimbedoutofthehole,wetandcoldfromheadtotoe.Harrytookoffhisowncoatandgaveittome,murmuringwithhisheadlowered,"
Iamsosorry..."
Unabletoutterasingleword,Ijustwantedtogobackhometohavesomethingwarm.
Paragraph2:
n?
emomentIcrashedthroughthekitchendoor,sobbing,mumrushedover.Worriedtoknowwhathappenedtome,mumraisedhervoiceandasked,"
IwenttothepondwithHarry,and..."
Iexplainedthewholethingtomum,andhardlycouldIcontainmytears.Aft
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