天龙八部详解篇.docx
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天龙八部详解篇
一.食品安全问题
到底什么是天龙八部?
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简单理解,就是八个可以在第二段当中构思的方面。
第二段最好是总分总的夹心式写法,论点点明深刻含义(或者先由浅入深),好事结论用反面论证,坏事用威胁性总结,而中间的5大可以使用的方面分别是:
象征点,现状+原因分析,INOTHERWORDS(影响和后果分析),举例联系实际,和层进的修辞手法。
其中最最最关键的是原因分析和后果分析。
注意到,这八个方面是可以构思的方面,不是要都写,都写的话,这一段一般人过200,高手过1000.P2注意尽量控制在6-7句以内.
下面将就今年重大的食品安全问题,来简单阐述一下P2的思想,并且教授如何有效简化P2的思路。
所有的论据如下:
1. 现状(罗列除了很多可以参考的写法)
1)Thepastseveralyearshaswitnessed/experiencedthephenomenonthatpeopleingrowing/increasing/expanding/mountingnumberssufferedfromthesevereconsequenceofunsafefood.
2)Thepastseveralyearsareaccompaniedbythedramaticincreaseofunsafefood.
3)Theunprecedentedeconomicdevelopmentoverthepastseveralyearsisaccompaniedbythedramaticincreaseofunsafefood.
4)Wecanthinkofavarietyofcheatingphenomenainourcontemporarysociety,suchasthepoisonousmilkwhichresultsinprevalentinfantkidneyproblem,andeggswhichcontainundesirablechemicalfactors,allofwhicharesoundinganalarmtooursociety.
2. 原因(写一条就可以,不写也没问题,但是要让文章显得有深度最好分析一下原因)
1).人们为了追求利润,而丧失了道德底线
2).国家监管不力,相关法律并未完善,给了不法分子漏洞
3).万能BT理由,社会压力巨大。
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1)Severalfactors,bothindividualandsocial,couldaccountforthenegativephenomenon.
2)Thereasonforthephenomenonmaybecomplicated,butwecan,toalargeextent,ascribeittothefollowinginterrelatedfactors.(1,2两句作用相同,都是引出两条原因。
注意没必要两条,一条就够,两条主要是为了层次感)
3)具体的两条理由,Ontheonehand,agreatnumberofpeopleareonlyinpursuitofthemaximumprofit,totallyturningablindeyeto/totallyignoringthebasicmoralityofthewholebusiness.
Ontheotherhand,ourlegalsystemisfarfromperfect,whichdirectlyorindirectlyprovidestheimmoralbusinessmenwiththechanceofcheating.
3. 后果/影响
Professionaldishonestyundoubtedlyexertsanadverseconsequenceonoursociety.
Initially,theyadverselyaffectthehealthconditionofnumerousconsumers,forthereasonthatconsumerscannoteasilyrecognizethem.Additionally,fakegoodsposeaprobableandpotentialthreatonournationaleconomy,because/asconsumersdonotbelievethemarketsystem.Inotherwords,thisphenomenonwillunderminethewholebusiness.Finally,wehavebusinesswithforeigncountries.Iffakegoodsarediscoveredintheoverseastrade,itwillundoubtedlyexertanegativeinfluenceonourreputation.
王江涛:
Itnotonlyputshonestbusinessmenatacompetitivedisadvantage,butalsounderminesthefoundationofprofessionalethicsinbusiness.
4. 威胁性总结
Ifweletthesituationgoasitis,thewholemarketeventheentiresocietywoulddeteriorateandcollapse/thewholemarketeventheentiresocietywouldbecomeunimaginableanduncontrollable/thewholemarketeventheentiresocietywouldbecomeuncurbed.
5. 举例说明Itcanbebestexemplifiedbythecaseofpoisonousmilkandotherdangerousfood.(其实就是联系实际,也可以说就是现状的具体体现)
6. 层进的修辞手法和转折的运用
1)Thereisnodenyingthefactthatthevirtueofhonestyshouldbeaccepted,appreciatedandadvocatedbyallthebusinessmen.Regrettably/However,thecurrentsituationisincompatiblewiththisidealconcept.
2)Itisundeniablethatwemustbehonest,whichshouldbeaccepted,appreciatedandadvocatedbyallthebusinessmen.Regrettably/However,itisruthlesslyandrelentlesslyignoredincontemporarysociety.
考研第二段就是以上内容的合理整合,加上第一句的论点
Simpleasthepictureis,itssubtleconnotationendeavorstoconvinceusthatdueattentionhastobepaidtotheprevalentandpervasiveissueofunsafefood.
和最后一句的结论(威胁性总结)Ifweletthesituationgoasitis,thewholemarketeventheentiresocietywoulddeteriorateandcollapse.
中间插入3-4句论据即可,成为一个夹心式的写法。
一定不能写太多,第二段控制在5--6句,7句冲顶
版本一论点+原因+结论(黑字是第二段首尾,几个版本都不变,其他是根据刚才的分析加入的论据)
Simpleasthepictureis,itssubtleconnotationendeavorstoconvinceusthatdueattentionhastobepaidtotheprevalentandpervasiveissueofunsafefood.Severalfactors,bothindividualandsocial,couldaccountforthenegativephenomenon.Ontheonehand,agreatnumberofpeopleareonlyinpursuitofthemaximumprofit,totallyignoringthebasicmoralityofthewholebusiness.Ontheotherhand,ourlegalsystemisfarfromperfect,whichdirectlyorindirectlyprovidestheimmoralbusinessmenwiththechanceofcheating.Ifweletthesituationgoasitis,thewholemarketeventheentiresocietywoulddeteriorateandcollapse.
版本二:
论点+现状+层进+结论
头尾两句不变
Simpleasthepictureis,itssubtleconnotationendeavorstoconvinceusthatdueattentionhastobepaidtotheprevalentandpervasiveissueofunsafefood.Thepastseveralyearshaswitnessed/experiencedthephenomenonthatpeopleingrowingnumberssufferedfromthesevereconsequenceofunsafefood.Wecanthinkofavarietyofcheatingphenomenainourcontemporarysociety,suchasthepoisonousmilkwhichresultsinprevalentinfantkidneyproblem,andeggswhichcontainundesirablechemicalfactors.Thereisnodenyingthefactthatthevirtueofhon
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