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WhenIchoosefriends,Idonotcarewhatworkthey
When的时间状语从句否定句what的宾语从句
doorwhichsocialbackgroundstheyarefrom,butI
并列句宾语从句转折
donoticethoselittlethingswhichrevealone’s
do表强调限定性定语从句
characters.Iwouldmakesurethatwereallycarefor
宾语从句
eachother,sothatnomatterhowmuchtimesgoesby
sothat结果状语从句
withoutseeingeachother,Iknowmyfriendswill
without的妙用
alwaysbethere,readytohelpifIneedthem.And
形容词的妙用if从句
Iknowwearetruefriendsindeed.
(★满分作文。
第二段,共有14处闪光点。
值得熟读+背诵)
⑵文理通顺
Astheproverbgoes,afriendinneedisafriend
过渡引用谚语
indeed.Wehopetohavefriends,butnotfair-weather
①前后平行结构,短小精悍②ones代替friends
ones.Atruefriendshouldbeonethatcanbetrusted
shouldbeonethat…even结构
evenwhenweareintrouble.Thevalueoftrue
friendshippresentsitselfonlywhenitistemperedby
意思:
磨练
hardship.
第二段。
熟读+背诵)
Bicycles---AnImportantTransportationMeansinChina
1.WhybicyclesarepopularinChina
2.BicyclesandCars
3.FutureofbicyclesinChina
Thebicyclewillberemainedforalongtimeinchinabutintheenditwillbedisappearedwiththeimprovalofpeople’slivinglevel
(文章第三段。
该段有多处错误,已用波浪线标出。
Thebicycle是特指某辆自行车应改为Bicycles;
其次,remain和disappear都是不及物动词Vi,不能用被动语态;
再者,不存在improval这个单词,不要随便造词,应改为improvement;
最后,生活条件一般不用livinglevel,而用livingstandard或standardofliving或style/wayofliving/life,表达同一个意思,单词越多越好,凑字数。
⑶表达正确
Haveyouabike?
Takingabikeisagoodway,mostpeoplethink.Butinuniversityitseemsnotasgoodasotherplaces.Bikesarepossibletobestolennowandthen.Havingabikeisn’talwaysgoodenoughforustobuyone…
(0分作文,文章第一段。
100%表达错误,内容反动偏消极。
如:
mostpeoplethink竟然后移)
ItisveryconvenienttousebikesinChina.Bikes
简洁明快、开门见山,值得学习。
don’tneedfuel,noragarageoralargeparkinglot.
Bikescangothroughnarrowstreetsandtheirprices
arelow.SobikesarethemostpopularvehiclesinChinatoday.(呼应、升华主题)
(★★满分作文,第一段。
文章的句子、结构虽然没有前两篇满分作文难,这就更显得它贴近我们的水平,是我们学习的榜样。
⑷前后连贯
GoodHealth
Outline:
1.Importanceofgoodhealth
2.Waystokeepfit
3.Myownpractice
Idon’teatmeatmuch.EachmorningItakethelongrunandinmysparetimeIlikeplayingtennisandvolleyball.InthiswayIkeepgoodheathandleadahappylife.
(第三段。
本段无语法错误、不跑题。
最大的毛病:
欠缺连贯和过渡。
一看,本段无过渡无连词。
因为:
1.段落的写作不要单纯地回答问题;
2.三段的写作要联系短文主题或主题用词。
这很重要!
刘老师就上段而整理如下:
Asforme,IenjoygoodhealthasIkeepasimpledietwithmorevegetables,fruitandlessmeat.Moreover
IdosomeexercisewheneverIhavetimesuchaslongdistancerunning,playingtennisorvolleyball.Asaresult,Ihavebeenatopstudentallthroughthefouryearsintheuniversity.Sogoodhealthisimportanttoeveryone.(呼应主题)
⑸刘老师总结的18句惯性思维错误。
(咋看之下是不是自己的经常表达?
1.★Part-timejobprovidebetterchanceforcollege
Jobschances
studenttopractice.
students(最普遍、次要的错误。
可数名词单数在句中一般不允许单独存在。
并列和对比可单独使用。
facetoface、bookandarm、arminarm)
2.★Inrecentyears,inthemarket,fakecommodities
Moreandmorefakecommoditieshavebeendiscoveredin
havediscoveredmoreandmore.
therecentyears.(最典型的汉语式英语intherecentyears介词短语要后置。
3.Mostofpeoplehavenothingtodobuttoidleall
去掉ofpeople后加who去掉to
thedaywillprobablybreaklaw.
4.Languagehasandalwayswillbeausefulsubjectin
has后加been
acollegecurriculum.
总课程
5.SometimeIwanttofindapartnertoplaychess.
改成Sometimeschess后加with(sometime:
指现在或过去的某时;
sometimes=attimes有时候;
sometime:
一段时间;
sometimes:
表频率、次数)
6.Iamdisinterestedatthematerialyouhave
改成uninterestedin
interest.
后加in(disinterest一般不作感兴趣用。
意思:
公正的。
此处用uninterested)
7.★Whytherearesomanyrespectable,middle-class
there和are换位
citizenssawmurderdidn’thelpthewomanorcallthe
saw前加whomurder后加but
police?
(本句出现多个动词而无连词)
8.★There’requiteafewofyouseemnotfamiliar
去掉There’re去掉not在seem前加donot
tothisidiom.
to改成with
9.★Advertisementsaresomanythatitprovideus
Manyadvertisementsprovideuswithalotofinformation.
manyinformations.
10.Somebodythinkthattheactivitiesaresomanythat
Somepeoplethinkthattherearesomanyactivitiesthatyour
yourtimeseemsnotadequate.
timedoesnotseemadequate
11.ThePhilipsaskmetheotherdayifIgotothere
askedgoto改成hadbeen
withherinmywillsincewebegintocooperatelast
改成outofmywill:
出于某人意愿
year.
12.Rudelanguageisnowsocommonthatitisanaccepted
去掉an
behavior.
13.Ithinkthecrimewillbemoreandmore.
crime后加there
14.Ithinkthereasonswhytheneighborsdidn’tcome
Ithinkthe改成Therewerealotof
outtosavethegirlwerealot.
去掉werealot
15.Somepeoplethinkboy’sperformanceintestisalwaysbetterthangirls.
girls’
16.★Eachcigarettewhichapersonsmokesdoessomeharm,andeventuallyyoumaygetaseriousdisease
you改成he(指代词混乱)
fromitseffect.
17.★Theindustrialtrendisinthedirectionofmoremachinesandlesspeople.
less改成fewer
18.★Theotherthingequal,thesewhoexcelwithoral
thingsat/in
experiencearemuchlikelysuccessfulthanaverage
去掉muchtosucceedthan后加the
person.
Ⅱ.TypesRequired
⑴APPLICATIONLETTER(申请信或求职信)
Directions:
Youareeagertoapplyforthepositionofaforeignenterpriseadvertisedinanewspaper.Writeanapplicationletterthatshowsyourmajor,specialty,abilityinforeignlanguagesandhobbiesandexpressesyourstrongdesiretoapply.
(你在报纸上看到一家外企的招聘广告,非常想去应聘。
写一封申请信,内容包括专业、特长、外语能力、爱好等,并表明强烈的应聘愿望)
DearSir,
Youradvertisementoffersamosttempting(有吸引力的、有诱惑力的)jobtoayoungmanjustoutofcollege.Ican’tthinkofanyjobI’dlikebetterthanasoftwaredevelopmentforafamouscompanylikeyours.Ilookuponitasawonderfulopportunity,andhereiswhatIcanofferyouinreturn:
Iam22yearsold,ahardworkingstudentwhospecializedinComputerScienceandApplicationatTsinghuaUniversity,fromwhichIwillgraduateandgetmyBSdegreeinJunethisyear.IcanspeakEnglishquitewell,andIamcapableofprogramminginseveralcomputerlanguagesandusecomputersveryskillfully.
(本段自报家门)
Besides,Ilikeverymuchtoparticipateinthegroupactivitiesofallkinds.Myworkthenbecomesinterestingandproductive.Thereason,inmyopinion,isthatworkingwithpeoplegivesuspowerandcompetition.Rivalryisaveryeffectivemotiveinimprovingoneperson’sidea.So,groupmembersmaycontributedifferentanessentialresourcestosolveproblems.Perhapsyouwillagreethatthesequalities—plusenthusiasm,persistence,andthewillingnesstoworkhardandlong—makemeacceptableforthejobyouofferasabeginnerinyourcompany.IbelieveIwoulddomoreandbetterworkforyou.
IenclosealetterofrecommendationfromProfessorLiu,andaself-addressed(写明发信人姓名地址的)card,inhopethatyouwilluseittotellmewhentocomeforaninterview.
AndIlookforwardtohearingfromyousoon.(Andyourimmediatereplywillbegreatlyappreciated)
Sincerelyyours,
LiMing
(250words)
(强烈建议熟读+背诵★本篇,把非划线部分做以适当的替换足以应付各类求职信)
NOTE:
Attheendofyourapplicationletter,donotforgettomentionyourrequestforinterviewsoastoshowyoureagernesstoapplyandelicit(引出,引起)enoughattention.Examplesareasfollows:
1.Ifyoudesireaninterview,Ishallbemosthappytocallinperson,onanydayandatanytimeyoumayappoint.
(此句很精彩:
别人给你面试的机会,难道你不亲自去而要找个代理人去吗?
这偏要强调inperson:
亲自去;
别人面试你难道不是在工作日吗?
这却强调onanyday:
在任何天;
别人面试你难道不是在上班的时间,会在半夜吗?
这竟偏强调atanytime:
在任何时间!
最后,may的精彩妙用又是一亮点。
精彩吧!
2.Shouldyouthinkfavorablyofmyapplication,kindlygrantmeaninterview.(如对本人之应征优先考虑,恳请准予面试。
3.Ihopethatyouwillbekindenoughtoconsidermyapplicationfavorably.
4.Itrustthatyouwillgivethisapplicationyourfavorableconsideration.
5.Shouldyougivemeatrial(试用),Iwilldomyutmosttoaffordyoueverysatisfaction.
6.Shouldthisapplicationmeetwithyourfavorableconsideration,Iwilldomyutmosttojustifytheconfidenceyoumayrepose(寄托)inme.
7.Iassureyouthatifmyapplicationbesuccessful,Iwilldomyverybesttopleaseyou.
(以上七句用以求职信的结尾表明强烈的求职愿望)
⑵PERSONALLETTER(私人通信)
Example1
Directions:
YouarepreparingforanEnglishtestandareinneedofsomereferencebooks.Writealettertothesalesdepartmentofabookstoretoaskfor:
1.detailedinformationaboutthebooksyouwant,
2.methodsofpayment,
3.timeandwayofdelivery.
Youshouldwriteabout100wordsonANSWERSHEET2.Donotsignyourownnameattheendoftheletter.Use“LiMing”instead.Youdonotneedtowritetheaddress.(10points)
(说明:
写应用文即小作文时,可用汉英的思路写,先想好中文该怎么说,然后翻译成英语。
写作文时一定不要出现真实的人名、地名,否者会有舞弊的嫌疑)
划横线的是可照抄的,划波浪线的需要替换,示例如下:
DearSir(s)orMadam(s):
(建议男生用madam,女生用sir)
Iamgoingtotakean…andIneedseveral/afew/acoupleof…(先说事由).OneofthemisReadingComprehension200(越长越好,凑字数),writtenbyProfessor×
×
.AnotherbookisHowtowritewell(也是越长越好,凑字数),publishedby×
/Universalpress(上一句用的是written,这句就该要published了).
Asfarasmethodsofpaymentareconcerned,mayIsuggestthatIwillsendthemoneytoyourbookstoreinperson(又见inperson)beforeItakethebooksaway(你都亲自去了,还不把书拿走吗?
这是巧妙地说废话,一个目的—凑字数)?
orshallIremit(汇款。
你会用remit表示汇款吗?
)themoneytoyou?
Asforthe…ofthebooksIwant,IhopethatyouwillgivemethebooksassoonasIpayy
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