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高考英语写作增分关键环节详解
emoreinteresting/fun/lesstiring/nolongerstudy-centered/exam-oriented.
3.白天Inthedaytime/duringtheday,Ioftenvisitmuseumsor学电脑及绘画learncomputeranddrawing/gotocomputeranddrawinglessons.
使用拟人句Daytimefindsmevisitingmuseumsorlearningcomputeranddrawing.
4.Intheevening,使用either…or句型Icaneitherwatchnewsreportsorreadnewspapersandbooks.
5.而且Whatismore/Inaddition/Besides/Moreimportantly,Igotobed/sleepearlierthanbefore—atteno’clock.
6.发挥一句Ihopethingswon’thavetochangeinthefuture/canbecomeevenbetter/thelearningloadcouldbefurtherreduced.Ihopeyouarealsoenjoyingpleasantweekendsnow.(作者:
方林广州新东方中学部优秀教师)
2009高考英语作文备考学案
Ⅰ.NMET书面表达第五项要求
1.覆盖所有的语言要点。
内容要点可用不同方式表达。
对紧扣主题的适当发挥不予扣分。
2.应用词汇和语法结构的数量和准确性。
值得注意的是语法结构或词汇方面虽有些许错误,但为尽力使用较复杂结构或较高级词汇所致;具备较强的语言运用能力。
3.有效地使用了语句间的连接成分,使全文结构紧凑。
Ⅱ.常见的不足
1汉语式英语2无过渡语3句式单一,平铺直叙
Ⅲ.如何增强书面表达效果
使用较高级的词汇
使用恰当的连接词
使用较丰富的句式
一、怎样使用较高级的词汇
1.Becausetheweatherwasgood,ourjourneywascomfortable.
2.Weallthinkheisagreatman.
3.SuddenlyIthoughtoutagoodidea.
4.Thestudentsthereneedn’tpayfortheirbooks.
5.Asaresulttheplanwasafailure.
6.Whensheheardhehaddied,shewentpalewithsorrow.
7.ShewenttoAustriainordertostudymusic.
8.Whenhespoke,hefeltmoreandmoreexcited.
9.Inourschool,therearetwenty-sixclassrooms.
10.Youcanfindmyhouseeasily.
二、怎样使用恰当的连接词
连接词使文章语意通顺,前后衔接紧密,可采用以下方法:
提示1:
恰当使用关联词,如when,so,if,because,sothat等。
提示2:
巧妙使用意思有联系的词或短语,如First,Second,Third,Soon,What’smore,Asaresult等。
提示3:
适当使用过渡性语句,如Thereasonsareasfollows./Everycoinhastwosides./Ontheotherhand,/Onthecontrary,
Besides,itwouldbebetterforhertohaveapetdogasIhavekeptoneathomeforsometime.(2007全国I)
First,shecanmakesomepocketmoneytomeetpetdailyneedsandthusdevelopasenseofindependence.Second,shecanlearnhowtodealwithvariousproblemsintheworkplace.Third,shecanbuildupnewfriendshipsandimprovebetsocialskills.(2007陕西)
Inmyopinion,learningEnglishisastep-by-stepprocess.(2007浙江)
连接词、句型的选择
1、递进关系
(肯定)Besides/What’smore/Also/Inaddition/Furthermore
(否定)What’sworse/Evenworse/Worsestill/Tomakemattersworse
2、时间
一…就…:
Themoment/Ondoing/assoonas/immediately/directly
不久:
Itwasnotlongbefore…/Afterawhile/Soon
然后:
Afterthat/Then/So/Next
同时:
Atthesametime/Meanwhile
3、转折:
however,/but/onthecontrary/Ontheotherhand/yet/although
4、顺序:
First/Second/Third/Last/Next/Then
5、条件:
If/Aslongas/Solongas/onconditionthat/unless
6、强调:
Itwas…that/who…/Soshedid./Idohope…/Shedidhelpme./Itreallyworked./besides/furthermore/moreover/what’smore/certainly/actually/infact
7、其它:
不得不做某事:
havetodosth./havenochoicebuttodosth./havenothingtodobutdosth.
有必要做某事:
Thereisnoneed(forsb.)todosth./Itisnecessary(forsb.)todo…
最好做某事:
You’dbetterdosth./It’sbettertodosth.
做某事没困难:
havenodifficultyindoingsth./havenotroubleindoingsth.
感谢某人:
thanksb./bethankfultosb./expressone’sthankstosb./begratefultosb./Thanksto…
求助某人:
turntosb.forhelp/asksb.forhelp/withthehelpof/withone’shelp
惊奇:
Toone’ssurprise/Insurprise/Surprisingly/only+不定式(表意外结果)
结果:
Asaresult/Therefore/Thus/So
总结:
Inaword/Inshort/Aboveall/Afterall/generallyspeaking/tosumup/inall/altogether/asisknowntoall
表达观点:
Inmyopinion/Ithink/Ibelieve/I’msure/Iguess
原因如下(很多):
hereasonsareasfollows./herearemanyreasonsforit.
浪费金钱(时间):
It’sawasteofmoney/time…
Task:
请在下列句子中(间)填上恰当的关联词或意思有联系的短语。
YaoMingwaswalkinginthestreetheheardsomeonecryforhelp.
HeadvisedthatIhireacarIcouldtravelaroundinthewest.
Itwasnotlongthepolicecame.
heheardthecryforhelp,hejumpedintothewatertosavethegirl.
oyouagreewithmyarrangement?
dowritetomesoon.
Wecangodowntownanddosomeshopping.,wecanpayavisittosomeplacesofinterest.
7、Isharedthecostofthegaswithmyfriends.,Isaved$80.
8、Eatingsugarisbadforourteeth.,itmaymakeusfat.
Task:
WritingPractice
请你给《中国日报》写一篇稿件,谈谈农村儿童失学的主要原因及你的看法。
原因:
1、家庭贫穷,供不起儿童上学,他们不得不在家赚钱养家。
2、部分家长认为女孩上学无用,不愿让她们上学。
3、部分儿童对功课不感兴趣,不愿上学。
看法:
1、每个儿童包括女孩都应有受教育的机会。
2、全社会都应重视儿童教育,他们对国家的未来将起到重要的作用。
要求:
1、不要逐字逐句翻译。
2、语句要连贯通顺。
3、字数100个左右。
Nowinthecountryareas,therearemanychildrenoutofschool.Mostfamiliesarepoorandcan’taffordtheireducation.Theyhavetostayathomeandmakemoney.Someparentsthinkdaughtersneedn’tgotoschool.Theydon’tletthemgotoschool.Somechildrenarenotinterestedintheirstudiesandwouldn’tliketogotoschool.
Allthechildrenincludinggirlsshouldbeeducated.Thewholesocietyshouldpayattentiontoit.They’llplayanimportantpartinthefutureofourcountry.
诊断:
?
优点]1、词能达意;
2、语句表达基本正确。
缺点]语句不够连贯
药方]1、使用常见句型;
2、每两个句子之间使用关联词或过渡词。
Nowinthecountryareas,therearemanychildrenoutofschool.▁▁▁▁▁▁▁▁。
▁▁▁,mostfamiliesaretoopoortosendtheirchildrentoschool.▁▁▁▁,theyhavenochoicebuttostayathomeandmakemoney.▁▁▁,someparentsthinkthereisnoneedfortheirdaughterstogotoschool.▁▁▁▁,theydon’tletthemgotoschool.▁▁▁,somechildrenarenotinterestedintheirstudies.▁▁▁▁▁▁,somewouldn’tliketogotoschool.
▁▁▁▁▁▁,allthechildrenincludinggirlsshouldbeeducated.▁▁▁▁▁▁,thewholesocietyshouldpayattentiontoit▁▁▁they’llplayanimportantpartinthefutureofourcountryoneday.
三、怎样使用较丰富的句式
方法一.使用非谓语动词使句子简洁高档
Rewritethesentences
1.Theyarrivedattheschool.Theyfeltthehappyatmosphere.
2.Iwillbegivenanotherchance.Iwillsucceed.
3.HewantstoimprovehisEnglish.Hestudieshard.
4Whenhearrives,pleasegivemeane-mail.(使用V-ing形式).
Completethesentenceswithnon-predicate(非谓语动词)
听到这个消息,他们变的很激动。
_________thenews,theygotexcited.
6.尽管被告知许多遍,他仍然重复这个错。
__________________manytimes,hestillrepeatedthemistake.
7.除非被邀请发言,你应该在会议上保持沉默。
Unless________tospeak,youshouldkeepsilentatthemeeting.
Translatethefollowingsentencesbyusingnon-predicate(非谓语动词)
8.面对困难时,他从不放弃。
9.引入市场后,该产品大获成功。
10.做完作业后,他回家了。
方法二.巧用倒装结构增强句子的表现力
Completethesentences
1.Hedidn’trealizehisfoolishnessuntilhereturnedhome.
Notuntil.
2.Wecansavetheearthbychangingthewaywelive.
Only.
3.Heiscleverbuthedoesnotworkhard.
as/though.
4.Theclocktowerstandsontheothersideofthestreet.
Ontheothersideofthestreet.
TranslatethesentencesbyusingInvertedSentences(倒装句)
5.他从不说关于他家庭的事。
6.只有我们每个人都意识到水的重要性,我们才能生活得更好。
7.只有用这种方式,我们才能有足够的精力好好学习。
8.Describethecharacter(济公)byusingInvertedSentence(倒装句)
9.他是个孩子,却知道很多。
10.墙上有个通知,上面写着“请节约用水”。
方法三.尝试多样化表达方式
1、感叹句e.g.1)HowhappyIwaswhenIreceivedyourletter.
2)Whatakindboyheis!
3)Howdisappointedhewas!
2、强调句e.g.Itwasthisyoungboythathelpedtheoldgranny.
3、倒装句e.g.1)Onlyinthiswaycanyousolvethisproblem.
2)Therecomesthepolicecar.
3)Hardlyhadtheygottothestationwhentheymettheyoungman.
4、省略句e.g.Theyreadwhilewalkingorridingonabus.
5、with短语e.g.Isawayoungladywalkingslowlyinthestreetwithahandbaginherhand.
6、定语从句e.g.Inmyopinion,cybercafesshouldbeaplacewherewecanfindmuchusefulinformation.
7、各种名词性从句e.g.That’swhatIshoulddo.
8、各种状语从句e.g.Useifferentwaystodescribethepicture(连战的破冰之旅)一…就受到欢迎
a.AssoonasLienChanandhiswifearrivedattheairport,theywerewarmlywelcomed.
b.Onarrivingattheairport,LienChanandhiswife…
c.LienChanandhiswifewerewarmlywelcomeddirectly/themomenttheyarrivedattheairport.
d.NosoonerhadLienChanandhiswifearrivedattheairportthantheywere…
e.HardlyhadLienChanandhiswifearrivedattheairportwhentheywere…
……
Task:
按要求改写下列句子,使其更具文采。
1.Hedidnotknowwhathadhappeneduntilhehadreadthenewsinthenewspaper.(强调句型)
2.IhopeIcanpayavisittoyounextyear.(强调)
3.Tomwaspuzzled.(感叹)
4.Itisgreatfuntoclimbthehill.(感叹)
5.TomandMarylikesingingsongs.(肯定倒装)
6.Johnlikestostudyandplay.(否定倒装)
7.ThoughI’mweak,I’llmaketheeffort.(使用倒装句)
8.Tohissurprise,thelittlegirlknowssomanythings.(使用名词性从句)
9.Soonthefirefighterscame.(表时间句型)
10.Inrecentyears,Beijinghasbeenadvancingveryfast.
Allthesemakepeople’slivesconvenient,pleasantandcolorful.
a._____________________________________________which_____________________________________
b.Withthedevelopmentof______________________
__________________________________________________
c.____________________________so___that________
______________________________________________
Translatethesentences:
我校是一所市重点中学,位于乐陵西郊。
校园很美,绿树成荫。
WestofLelingliesourschool,whichisakeyschoolofDezhoucity.Itisbeautiful,surroundedwithmanytrees/withmanytrees.
Task:
书面表达:
联合国教科文组织某考察团正在我国某乡村参观考察。
假定你是接待人员,请根据下列提示以发言稿的形式简要介绍这个村的情况:
1)大小:
近100户人家,约500口人。
2)变化:
过去很穷,78年后变化很大。
人们生活比以前好多了。
现已旧貌换新颜。
3)教育:
原来的学校很小,现已经过改建。
新建的教学楼有4层,是村里最美的建筑物。
村所有学龄儿童在此免费就读。
注意:
1)要点齐全,前后连贯。
2)词数:
100-120之间。
Ladiesandgentlemen,
Welcometoourschool!
①Thisvillageisverysmall.Ithasnearly100familiesandabout500people.Itusedtobeverypoor.②Ithaschangedalotsince1978③.Peoplehere④arericherthanbefore.Nowitistakingonanewlook.
Inthepast,theschoolherewasverysmall⑤.⑥Nowithasbeenrebuilt.⑦Thenewlybuiltteachingbuildinghas4storeys⑧.Itisthemostbeautifulbuildinginthevillage.Alltheschool-agechildrencanstudyhere.⑨Theyenjoyfreeeducationinit.
⑩Thankyou.
Ladiesandgentlemen,
Welcometoourschool!
①Thisvillageisasmallonewith/whichhasnearly100familiesandabout500people.Itusedtobeverypoor.②However,ithaschangedalotsince1978③andhasbeendevelopingveryfast.④Peoplehereliveamuchbetterlifethanbefore.Nowitistakingonanewlook.
Inthepast,theschoolherewasverysmall⑤andmostchildrencouldn’taffordtogotoschool.⑥Butnowithasbeenrebuilt⑦andthenewlybuiltteachingbuilding⑧whichhas4storeysisthemostbeautifuloneinthevillage.Alltheschool-agechildrencanstudyhere.⑨What’smore,theyenjoyfreeeducation.
⑩Mayyouenjoyyourstayhere/Mayyouhaveapleasanttimehere!
Thankyou.
Ⅳ.习作分析
Task:
书面表达(满分25分)
某中学生英语报社正开展一场题为“Youngteachersorelderlyteachers,whichdoyouprefer?
”
请你依据下面表格所提供的要点写一篇短文,向该报社投稿。
注意:
1.词数100左右,开头语已为你写好,不计入总数;
2.短文必须包含表格的全部内容。
要求观点明确,结构合理,紧凑连贯
学生作品1:
Comparewithyoungteachers,Ipreferelderlyteachers.Therearesomereasonsbelow.
Foronething,mostofelderlyteachersarepatientinteaching.Theynotonlysparenoefforttoteachthestudents,butalsogiveclassescarefully.Theywilldoalltheycantomakethestudentsunderstandtheteachingcontent.Whatgoodteachers!
Foranotherthing,elderlyteachersarefullofteachingexperience.Thisisalsothemostimportant,especiallyforusseniorstudents.
Thisisonlymyopinion.Ithinkyoungteachersarealsogood.
点评:
亮点:
1、观点鲜明,词汇句型的运用比较灵活
2、过渡词及连词的使用使文章结构紧凑连贯、条理清楚。
不足之处:
1、个别地方的表达需要改进。
1)Compared
2)more
3)trytomaketheclasseslivelyandinteresting
2、审题不全面,忽略了对青年教师这部分信息的处理。
这一点是比较大的失误。
学生作品2:
Opinionsaredividedonthisquestion.
Somestudentswholiketheelderlytea
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